So today in Kerry's class we looked at some cool closed cpoetry–sorry, poetry. Anyways, I really liked a lot of the forms so I wanted to quickly post what I wrote in the 8 minutes we were left to experiment with...going to work in like ten so I'm going to have to write fast, edit and add to the blog later. See, I'm that excited about trying some of these out!
Also, kind of upset because I waited on a table of eight today and managed to sell 7 of them the soup special...leaving no beef soup for me! I may have a super donair when I get back to work, and though it is not the soup for soul, it is pretty damn good. :)
Remember, this is rough!!
I have trouble sleeping,
voices crawl along pillows
leaving stains on the satin.
His red wine kisses–toxic,
arms strong and bent like bars
and caging me to his heart.
He leaves the window wide–
to let in my nightmares.
I close my drunken eyes,
remaining wide awake.
Remaining wide awake,
I close my drunken eyes
to let in my nightmares.
He leaves the window wide;
and caging me to his heart,
arms strong and bent like bars.
His red wine kisses, toxic,
leaving stains on the satin.
Voices crawl along pillows,
I have trouble sleeping.
I will be BACK...after I work.
Radical! Love it (Palindrome). Like I said before, I initially thought "this style is lazy - you only write half a poem and then bam! You're done." But it totally works, the imagery shifts depending on which way you read it. Lovely : ) I hope you get soup today.
ReplyDeleteWow - nice work! I tried writing a palindrome, and I failed -- big time! I really admire your ability to come up with something like this on a first draft.
ReplyDeleteWow - nice work! I tried writing a palindrome, and I failed -- big time! I really admire your ability to come up with something like this on a first draft.
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